Seinvocc

Welcome! How is your character name pronounced? If it helps, here's a handy-dandy reference sheet for phonetic symbols: http://www.ling.upenn.edu/courses/ling115/phonetics.html Hmm, okay. I'll help proofread this later. As far as the content, it's a bit cliché, but it works, mostly . . . Have you re...

Like I said earlier, since all of your abilities are either instantaneous or modes of constant influence, you really don't need the "Action" segment of your format at all. No big deal, in any case. Well, the point was that you were capitalizing on TD specifically. Again, as you previously read , I h...

Other than rephrasing your HE to just "above average" to keep with the rest of your pattern, your stats and parameters look fine. Yes, you're a dangerous physical unit, but you make up for it by being shitty with magic. It's completely fair, as the math shows. Good job. Then again, you're still work...

Lei started to shake her head as Jack mentioned a temporary replacement, since she was used to being able to handle herself, but she caught herself, turning the negative nod into just a motion of craning her head around to view surrounding environs and the people that were within eyesight, which was...

"Right . . ." Leilani gave a slow, knowing nod and blink, completely understanding the man's predicament. "Allow me to reciprocate with a similar inquiry: Have you heard of Noah Ivaldi? I-V-A-L-D-I. Tall, hume summoner in dark robes, hopefully carrying a blood-red staff and commanding all sorts of s...

Leilani's eyes rolled back in thought for a brief moment.

"Don't think so. Was he famous there or something?"

In proofreading my expendables list, I toned down a couple of the larger numbers, such as reducing the Ark ammo and buckshot by 300 each. I don't feel like I explicitly needed to, but I'm a good RPer, and I'm always so ammo-stingy, so I may as well challenge myself a bit. While I was at it, I reduce...

I reduced flinch factors and took out the 0 knockback clause.

I weakened Ether Cannon. The mana boost is worth the time when it's just double the charge, never mind triple.

"K's, the Soluna System. Why do you ask?"

Bianca's body tilted, and she put her hand on her hip, which was effective body language for, 'This interests me a bit, but I have no idea when I'll say something wrong, so I'd best be ready to draw and shoot if I have to.'

"Angelo, Dark Genie, Loth, Nezz? Any of those sound familiar? I'm from the home dimension of one of the Royals."

Lei slumped in a disappointed manner.

"Damn . . . We had just met, but she was very sweet. I was looking forward to having a great friend to get acquainted to this world with. Does this happen often, here? Was it an Archvillain attack, or do we not know?"

"Hello. Yes. Erm, she's not here, then?"

Leilani had been discomforted by the man's demeanor as she approached, but the indication that seeing Bianca was a strictly past-tense matter upset her a bit more. Her expression conformed to Jack's, reflecting her concern, as well.

Heh, not bad. About my only half-gripe is that dragon claw-sharpened gems aren't as uncommon here as you might imagine, as implied by your tone there. Very few English mistakes, too. Not bad, man. Not bad at all. ^_^

Lei hugged back, then giggled at the little stunt.

"Smooth."

With a small grin, she picked up where she left off, wading through the shallow waters to catch up with Bianca, the cottage now successfully made.